The clock ticks on, yet sleep eludes her still.
She doesn't toss or turn though, choosing instead to stare fixedly at the luminous second hand of her alarm clock. The steady staccato 'tick' of each passing second fails to lull her to sleep, and with each minute, and hour, she grows more convinced that she will lie like this till morning.
She forces her eyes closed one more time, forcing her tired brain to dream, yet like a blank slate it remains bare, waiting for someone to touch it in a way it will understand.
And she knows who that someone is.
"Are you awake?", a slurred voice says to her from the direction of the door.
She turns over, slowly, feigning sleepiness.
"Yes, yes I am ", she replies, softly.
"Good. What are you doing?"
"Dreaming. Of you..", she lies.
In the dim light, she can see a lopsided smile spread across his face.
"Good...", he drawls, slowly walking towards her, while taking off his clothes. His black, cold eyes light with a dull, ugly sparkle as he climbs into the bed with her.
And so, the clock ticks on, yet happiness eludes her still.
My second attempt at the Indie Ink Writing Challenge (for my other entry, click here). My challenge this week was simply "Faking A Smile", given to me by Joe Sanders. In turn, I challenged Jason Hughes with a rather complicated challenge of writing a 'tragic romance' that was centered around breakfast (don't ask!). You can see his response here.
I seem to have a thing about writing dramatic fiction centered around women. I'm sure someone will probably psychoanalyse me for that, but please don't bother. For this particular post I was inspired by Pearl Jam's "Better Man" as well. I hope you enjoy it!
She doesn't toss or turn though, choosing instead to stare fixedly at the luminous second hand of her alarm clock. The steady staccato 'tick' of each passing second fails to lull her to sleep, and with each minute, and hour, she grows more convinced that she will lie like this till morning.
She forces her eyes closed one more time, forcing her tired brain to dream, yet like a blank slate it remains bare, waiting for someone to touch it in a way it will understand.
And she knows who that someone is.
She smiles, as she thinks of him. His lively, light brown eyes, and his laugh; the loud one when among friends, and the softer, more personal chuckle he reserved only for when they were alone together. She imagines his strong arms around her, carrying her away to distant and exotic locations. Anywhere would do, as long as he was there.
Suddenly, there's a sound at the door, and her eyes fly open as her dream evaporates in an instant. There's a pause, and heavy footsteps slowly enter the room. Her body involuntarily tenses, waiting, apprehensive.
"Are you awake?", a slurred voice says to her from the direction of the door.
She turns over, slowly, feigning sleepiness.
"Yes, yes I am ", she replies, softly.
"Good. What are you doing?"
"Dreaming. Of you..", she lies.
In the dim light, she can see a lopsided smile spread across his face.
"Good...", he drawls, slowly walking towards her, while taking off his clothes. His black, cold eyes light with a dull, ugly sparkle as he climbs into the bed with her.
She takes a quick breath, looks him dead in those eyes and smiles wide, a smile that is as warm as it is forced. He doesn't notice it either way. As for her, well; for yet another night, her hopes have abandoned her for reality, her memories of a better time deserting her when she needed them the most. Her dreams of 'him', lost in the sands of time, confined to her subconscious, never to be realised except in the waning hours of daylight.
And so, the clock ticks on, yet happiness eludes her still.
My second attempt at the Indie Ink Writing Challenge (for my other entry, click here). My challenge this week was simply "Faking A Smile", given to me by Joe Sanders. In turn, I challenged Jason Hughes with a rather complicated challenge of writing a 'tragic romance' that was centered around breakfast (don't ask!). You can see his response here.
I seem to have a thing about writing dramatic fiction centered around women. I'm sure someone will probably psychoanalyse me for that, but please don't bother. For this particular post I was inspired by Pearl Jam's "Better Man" as well. I hope you enjoy it!
13 comments:
Very well written. I felt what she was feeling. Very nicely done.
Diane
eek :(
Oh dear... :S
I really enjoyed it. I especially liked the last paragraph, it really put me in her shoes.
I feel sorry for her. She doesn't see to realize that she deserves better. Why else stay with someone who doesn't even realize she is giving him "a fake smile" or does he even care?
visiting from Indie Ink
Oof. Well done.
A great song and a wonderful answer to the challenge.
Thanks, everyone, for your comments!
Dee & Angel: I think that's the emotion I was trying to get from the readers.. haha
Carrie: sometimes circumstance just creeps up on you, and before you know it, you're in a trap of your own making. Sometimes we're just not strong enough to do what we should do.
You Can Call Me 'Sir': Yes, lovely song isn't it? Thank for your comment.
wow! that is awesomely written!
I don't quite think she was dreaming of the same guy.
This was nicely written and a great response to the prompt. We fake so much in life and your piece captured that sentiment perfectly.
G, I thought you were kept quite busy at your job... but you obviously have time to spare ;-)
R: Where there's an active imagination,there's a way.. and nice catch on the 'alude', thanks!
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